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This is only a goodbye
The remains of a fireplace
Burned 'till it's black
But eternal as amber

Unfortunately, our tears
Could not extinguish the flame
Eating you from the inside

Let me, my dear friend
Tell you how we'll miss you
Staring at every star in the night
Nothing will replace your joy

'Cause you'll be a million miles away
When you'll get this letter
You'll be a million miles away
You should be better
©2009 ~Trante
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:iconemerysmallor:
thank you, this piece...means much more than I could possibly express, thank you.
:icontrante:
your welcome

i know that knowing someone who is dieing from cancer is hard not only for the person dieing but for her friends and family. She died last weekend.

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Riot be the rhyme of the unheard!
:iconshalayna:
At some point a shiver ran across my spine. I believe it was when I read "When you'll get this letter [...] You should be better"

I also liked this passage;; "Burned 'till it's black - But eternal as amber"

Very touching. Sorry for the loss. It's short and sweet but there's somesort of "umph" missing to it, imo. Though I'm sure that's not at all what you're looking for.

Nonetheless, nice job.

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To love and be loved. Cared for and caring for.
{Friends don't let other friends do stupid things... alone}
:icontrante:
i know what is missing. a line in the second paragraph. i couldn't find something that would fit right in there.

thanks

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Riot be the rhyme of the unheard!
:iconshalayna:
You're welcome!

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To love and be loved. Cared for and caring for.
{Friends don't let other friends do stupid things... alone}
:iconxdesignsillusion:
This is so strong.... I´m freezed ....

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:icontrante:
lol thanks

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Riot be the rhyme of the unheard!
:iconmalumvolo:
This is powerful, thanks.
:icontrante:
no problem :P
thanks too

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Riot be the rhyme of the unheard!

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